My Chapter 8 and Ideas

Okay, I looked over this Chapter and found that there are some part that is really bugging me but I could be wrong. I looked over this chapter more than any other, I may have over looked some errors and grammar mistakes.

Chapter 8: Old Crush (Okay I may change this title I am not sure yet.)

A second later Stephanie entered the quiet garden, this should have made her worry. But no,she walked until she came to the bench on the south side of the house; where a large oak tree stood. Sadness and loneliness came over her. She came alert and glanced towards the pinkish sky from the sunset, for a moment, she saw a young brunette curly-haired woman in a velvet purple gown staring back towards her in the distant. In a blink of an eye she vanished.

The atmosphere become unsettled and she turn without noticing the shadow behind her.

“Oh my, what do I have here?” a male voice asked in crisp southern drawl, “Why it’s a fair maiden?” Pausing, “Have you come to rescue me from my boredom?”

Hawk Millsom was ready to leave for his own home, when a full figure, mysterious young brunette woman, in a velvet green short sleeve dress slip out from
the side door. Nobody used this door in years and this intrigued him.
Without saying a word, he watched her from his spot near the huge oak tree. She froze in place and started to back away. He just had to meet her.

Her face went red, she recognized the southern drawl of Hawk Millsom, her best friend’s older cousin, and her crush.
Oh, heaven help me. Taking a deep breath, she took to face him now.
Sure enough, five foot five, medium built, even tan, sandy brown-haired stood there with mischief in his dreamy blue eyes.

That innocent sweet smile of hers shook him to the core. It was familiar but he could not place her.
Did they meet in Locksomville or even on Moon Isle few years ago.
Her blushing brought back a forgotten memory, of a
shy, short-haired brunette teenage girl with brown eyes,which turned a golden color when she was rile.
His brows rose,“Stephanie?”He never predicted the girl, no – woman of his dreams, ever return, to him or here tonight.
No, he could not be nervous? Hawk Millsom never become nervous in front any young woman.

Do not judge him that way, Stephanie Rose! A voice answered back.

Stephanie ignored this, “Yes, Mr. Millsom.” His facial expression went blank.

Her voice was music to his ears.But since when she called him, Mister? His mother and Aunt popped up in his mind. When did you start calling me, Mister?” he asked.
“Oh, it’s out of respect.” she said bluntly, “You know respect those who are older.”

Is she calling him old? She was avoiding eyes contact and fretting with her bracelet? This meant one thing.
She is nervous.“Are you saying I’m old?” he asked with this serious frown on his face.
Her face is burning now. “Of course not!” She pushed her bangs from her face.“It is a habit.”
Well, let see if I can break her habit. He glanced towards her ruby-red lips, and stepped to her side. “Hmm..,I believe you, Stephanie Rose.” he said inches from her lips. “But if you had meant it, I have to prove you wrong, Sweetheart.”
Her mouth went dry as she visualized him taking her into his arms and kissing her. No, this cannot happen!
Hawk Millsom always thought of her as his younger cousin best friend and the town lowlife.He was never interested in her and realize he is playing a game.
“Oh, how Mr. Millsom?” she asked teasing, before turning to leave. He is.. Trailing off as large strong tanned hands reach for her slim waistline and swung her around,
this made her braid rest beside her left breast, for a moment his blue eyes rested there.
“This way Sweetheart.” he said pulling her against his hard lean built chest and kiss her mouth.

Honey came to mind, when his mouth touched hers; it lingered for a moment as her lips parted. An electrical jolt pass through them, this broke their contact or maybe the sound of footsteps. ( Okay, this is the part that is bugging me, I might have to take another look over this scene,)

“What are you doing with my fiancée?” Rosa Abbott exclaimed with hidden smirk.
Modified. No way, he cannot be engaged ! Her whole world came crashing, with a straight face; she glanced towards Hawk and ignored the younger brunette woman’s comment.
“You’re..” She trailed off as cover her mouth and gave him an accused look.Without waiting for his reply, she hurried off, before she made bigger fool out of herself.

“Wait Stephanie !” he called out.
“Oh, she is rude.” Rosa Abbott said bluntly.

“What the hell are you doing?” he roared out, “You and I never been engage?”

In total disbelief, Rosa stared at the spot Hawk once stood. Pure hatred came over her at once.

***

“Are we still on for tonight?” she asked in a low tone, “Yes, I know the risk .”
She rolled her eyes towards the ceiling now, “Yes of course, bye.” she hung up the phone.

The stranger stood outside the bay window and plotted. With an evil grin, he walked towards the dark forest, which lead him to his hiding place.

Okay, when I wrote this part I wanted the reader to get a sense of shock and mystery. I also wanted the  stranger to make another appearance.

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